1. Real teen screenplay & criticism 2. my parents' animal flood

1. I am watching a pilot episode. 7 girls on the day they turn 14. The premise is that they are conscious of who they will be when they're much older, but they're telling the story from when they're 14. All of the girls in the pilot episode are real people who I went to middle school with. There is a voiceover that comes in and foreshadows what will happen next and gives creepy "insider" information. When D is on the screen, the voiceover says that I went down on her in middle school. (There is no mention of what effect this has on D's life.) In disbelief I say "That just didn't happen." There are few others that I don't remember now, the last is a girl- Mary, sits up in a top bunk bed. She says to the camera "I just turned 14 this minute, and I just now got my period." Then the camera does a close-up of her chest. She is wearing a hospital gown, removes that, then starts to remove her bra.  I say audibly -"Now this is in poor taste, I really hope they don't go there." She removes her bra and reveals breasts that have had a horrible boob job, perfectly spherical and with odd indentations in the skin on the outer underside.
I turn to A and start having a discussion with him. I say "So that's my screenplay." He shrugs, and I say "but I was thinking about having this one part where she takes off her bra and we see her terrible boob job." Then he says "You can go that route I guess, but it seems like overtelling. The audience is already going to assume the worst...so if you put that in there it'll just take away the fun of them getting to know her story more slowly."

2. There are a lot of animals showing up randomly: a jackal, possums, squirrells, raccoons, hares, deer, large insects and arachnids, armadillos...etc. They are coming in one at a time to my parents house, and they are neither staying nor running away quickly. I'm trying to help my mom have a yard sale. We are just looking at some bright coral colored cutrains together and a man is about to sing a song. I go into the garage where I pick up an old swimsuit. I open the door and see a jackal bounce away like a kangaroo. There is ocean water coming up over the stairs and it keeps coming. I say to my mom "We have to just keep going." We go out the livingroom window, and walk past the Rolleighs' house and just kind of leisurely relax in the sun. A few hours later we go back home, everything looks kind of fine, really, but I know that we ought to set up an appointment with the carpet cleaners.